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.:Calamity of Love:. by ~DarkFeruil:iconDarkFeruil:



I see it in her eyes…
The twinkling charm…
The everlasting beauty that lay hidden…in furls…
Waiting to be unfold…
By the worthy of men…the chosen…
Lithe in form, rosy lips and cheeks…
Sweetness all the while…
Her welcoming arms…enfolding like silken ribbons…enchanting…
Soft fragrance…awing trance that I lay…
Gossamer gown of angelic trait…
Her silken skin pressing earnestly against mine…
Promising…her heart…her love…
Yet…in the end…she betrayed me…she broke me…
After all that I did…she left me…
The calamity of my unraveling…
©2004-2010 ~DarkFeruil
:icondarkferuil:

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.....entry for *sigh* I'm going to do another one because.....I'm bored.....*hehe...wait, I shouldn't promise...but maybe...><* I'm practicing my vocabulary!!! XD

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:iconsqtifa:
Oh wow...it will be an honor to lose the contest against this poem ^_^
:icondarkferuil:
It's THAT good?!!! O____O;; Hmmm....I'm thinking of submitting something else too...>> Thanks though!! :hug:
:iconcomethius:
Such detail of the woman, and how that beauty seems to fade as the end draws near...
I have always loved this talent you have to paint a picture perfect detail about someone...
Something I'm still working on and may be working on for quite sometime. ^^

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:icondarkferuil:
*chuckles* Yeah....well, that's how I portray my thoughts to the reader. ^___^ I speak through words more than my mouth. Yeah...^^; mmmm....thanks, man! :hug: Well, just keep practising and I'm sure a nice composition shall come up from the buds of a rose!!! XD
:iconcomethius:
Yes you're very talented indeed.
And you're quite welcome you deserve more comments than...
what is handed to you...
I certainly hope the rose shall grace me with something lovely for my second entry.
:hug:

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:icondarkferuil:
Indeed! I hope it shall too! X3
:iconkurara-shikaze:
Wow! Prettyness... I dunno what more to say but good luck (you don't need it anyway)
Love hurts ;_;
:icondarkferuil:
Thanks!! :hug: Yes, it does....especially if you care about that person a lot and something bad happens.....T^T
:iconsolariguti:
without love there is no pain. and with love there is always pain.
the human condition, but i liked it. very deep and thoughtful.
excellent work! :hug:

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